Thursday, 29 March 2012

united family

There are two men called willi wonka and simon puttok who were best friends they lived in paris.Simon always medelled with things around him.But there was also a secrate that they were brothers but they didn't knew it.Mr. bucket and Mrs.bucket were his duplicate parents and they were and furious people. They  ruined all  the things around them.Mr.twit and Mrs.twit were the real parents of willi and simon.Mr. and Mrs twit also had one more child called Charlie twit. The duplicate parants blackmailed Mr.and Mrs.twit.Charlie knew this secrate.He went and told the whole secrate to willi and simon.They went and searched their parents and while searching they reached the mountains.They did skating but they tumbled down hill .They didn't have any money to eat , so they went in a show where they did somersaults and competed with many others. They won 500 rupees and they ate their food . when they went to the eiffel tower something amazing happened. They bumped into their real parentswith the cat who was chewing his whiskers.Mrs twit was looking very elegant in her blue dress. The whole family leaped and cheered with joy . Buffon charlie told willy and simon the big secret. 

1 comment:

  1. Good work girls! It's great to see you using such good words. I've edited the story a bit and have pasted the edited version on the class blog. Analyze how the changes have improved the quality of the story.